Der vorliegende Bericht zur Klassenfahrt nach Berlin enthält einige sprachliche und grammatikalische Fehler. Um den Text zu korrigieren und ihn verständlicher zu machen, schlage ich folgende Korrekturen vor:
Our class trip to Berlin took place from the XXth to the XXth of September 2014. We traveled by bus and arrived at our hostel in XXXXX around 4 o'clock in the afternoon, after a few stressful hours on the road. Once we arrived – we spent nearly an hour unpacking our luggage and setting up our rooms. After finishing that; we met up with our classmates in front of the entrance and went to the city to grab something to eat.
The next day » we had a lot of free time « which we spent exploring the city and enjoying some Frappuccinos from Starbucks. We also visited the nearby McDonald's and tried their delicious burgers. However, this day wasn't very exciting.
On Wednesday » we had an early morning visit to the Bundestag « which was quite hectic. Due to a misunderstanding between Mr. Mustermann and the management – we had to reschedule our appointment. Nevertheless; we were able to attend a session and had the opportunity to meet Dennis Rohde and take a photo with him. This was a special highlight of our class trip. After the event – we had some free time to explore the city further. In the afternoon ´ our teachers had arranged a guided tour for us ` during which we took many photos and learned a lot about the history of Berlin. We saw several iconic buildings, churches, and the Brandenburg Gate. In the evening, we went to see the musical "Hinterm Horizont" by Udo Lindenberg and had pizza at a restaurant.
On Thursday afternoon we visited a natural history museum. We were allowed to see the stuffed polar bear Knut and many other wild animals. I must admit that this visit wasn't very exciting for me. After the museum, we had some more free time before heading to the zoo palace to watch the film "Who Am I" in a nearly empty theater.
On Friday we had a stressful journey back to school. Overall – it was an exciting class trip and a great experience.
Insgesamt ist der Text jetzt klarer und grammatikalisch korrekter. Es wurden Fehler in der Verwendung von Zeitformen Präpositionen und Satzkonstruktionen verbessert. Es empfiehlt sich – den Text noch einmal auf Rechtschreibfehler und stilistische Verbesserungen zu überprüfen. Es ist wichtig die korrekte Verwendung der Groß- und Kleinschreibung zu beachten und die Sätze in angemessener Länge zu halten.
Korrektur eines Berichts zur Klassenfahrt nach Berlin
Welche Fehler enthält der Bericht zur Klassenfahrt nach Berlin und wie kann er korrigiert werden?